Mistakes in the introduction of Shah – Find out with reasons




My student has written his introduction below

My name is Shah Samand Samandary i am fom Afghanistan i gratitude from university in 2011 after that i work in ministry Agriculture ,in 2017 by pas the examination of ICAR came to india for Msc in vegetable science now i sm live in Bangalore city

 

Now, I am rectifying your mistakes:-




1st sentence

Correct – My name is Shah Samand Samandary
Correct – I am from Afghanistan

 

2nd sentence




Wrong Spelling of graduate– I gratitude from university in 2011
You should say
I graduated from University in 2011

 

 

3rd sentence

Wrong – after that i work in ministry Agriculture

There are two mistakes here
The sentence should be in Past Tense
Put “ed” in “Work”
Also use “of” after ministry of Agriculture




We always say

Ministry of Agriculture
Ministry of Home
Ministry of Labor
Ministry of Child and Women Empowerment

 

4th sentence:-

Wrong – In 2017 by pas the examination of ICAR came to india for Msc in vegetable science

There are three mistakes

Never say “by passing examination”
Always say “After passing examination”

Why you didn’t use any pronoun?
After ICAR, add “I”




Why you said “FOR MSC?
What do you mean by  it?
Categorically mention
For “DOING” Msc

So, the correct sentence will be
In 2017, after passing the examination of ICAR, I came to Bagalore for doing Msc in vegetable science .

 

 

5th sentence

(wrong) “i am live in Bangalore city ”

After I, if you are adding “am”, then the main verb (live) in this case, will have “ing”
or if there is no helping verb (am here), then the main verb won’t have “ing”
For example, you can say

I live in Bangalore   (correct)
or

I am living in Bangalore  (correct)

Never say “I am live “




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